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December 29, 2009
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Storm Breaking by justMANGO Storm Breaking by justMANGO
The storm breaks, but dawn is not the new beginning.

Download for all the details. There are lots of details.

A fight scene between two characters of my work-in-progress story: Faye Phlorik (left) and Lucas Rhine (right). This scene does not exist in the actual story. The two of them will probably never have a real fight with each other. They just happen to be my test subjects for this drawing.

I've worked on this for a week and half. It didn't turn out to be as dramatic as I had originally pictured it to be, but I guess it's pretty good for a first ever attempt at full background. I did (or at least attempted to) do everything properly. That is, from sketching to perspectives to colouring and all. There are still tones of problems but I got too fed up to fix it (short attention span got in the way). Oh well, next time.

Edit Dec 2012: I tweaked at the background because it had always bothered me. More texture has been added to the grass and mountains, mainly.
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I love this I love to illustate scenes in my OC fiction too
justMANGO Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D Thanks!
Hixateez Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Now this is a very dynamic piece! The color palette is very appealing as it has a sinister tone to it that goes especially well with the name of this picture.
The clouds look really heavy in the front and lighter in the back, which I think is a good thing.

I like the grass vey much:) It has realistic texture and shows where he beams of light that get past the clouds hit the ground! I wish he same applied to he mountains, because while they don't look bad or poor to me at all, they are a little srange-looking to me. It's probably that the ones closer to us have a lot of contrast but it doesn't do much to bring out their shape and I don't think it shows where the light is coming from that well. But after saying that I also have to say I think their shape and rocky nature are well done here, despithe blotchy light areas.

It looks like the two are fighting in a steppe, which I think is a nice choice for environment. It's also very interesting, because the mountains seem like they're everywhere around a wide, somewhat empy place where these two are just beginning an epic battle...
Faye's pose is really good. He's diving down, ready to atack Lucas, with on sword ready and the other waiting! His hair and clothes show movement, and he has a stern, focused face. And I like his clohes! Really, my only issue with him is that his wings look awfully thin where they start. I'm not very knowledgeable when it comes to the anatomy of wings, though. I suggest you have a look at how birds' wings look when spread out, and what the muscles and bones look like.
Lucas' staff is awesome. The gear-design and wooden staff are boh appealing details to me;) I like his clothes a lot as well (brown and white look good together) and I don't really have any issues with his pose, either.

Now, what I would like to point out about both of them is that I find your use of outlines a little odd. Faye's boots, for example, appear to have black outlines while his skin apparently doesn't. I'd personally prefer it if you stuck to a "red string" with them, as in all outlines of a certain color, or all outlines in suiable colors, or no outlines at all. Finding a balance can be tricky, though, and this is just a personal opinion.
One oher thing is that Faye and Lucas are not actually facing each other nor looking at each other, which kind of distracts from the fact that they're about to fight. Especially because Lucas looks like he's closer to use than Faye, but maybe it's just my imagination.
And this last point is not really related to the drawing, but I think it's a shame that there's a lot of deal that can't be seen in he fullview! And the downloaded picture fills up my entire screen and I have to scroll to even find the characters. Yet I don't think this picture would work if there wasn't that much background shown.

So, um, I hope I could be of some help!
And please ask me if I was unclear or if you'd like additional opinions from me on this piece.
Also, my keyboard is a little worn-out and T isn't working right^^; So my comment may lack a few T letters here and there^^;
justMANGO Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the review, and no worries on the missing T's. =P

The problem with the outline is that I didn't do a superb job at colouring them/hiding them behind the colour in certain places. That's easily fixable. Thanks for point it out! :D

And yea, the positioning of the characters has always a point of bother. Now that you mention it, it really does seem like they're not looking at each other. More things to fix!

The size of the damn thing is pretty depressing though. It's too bad that there isn't a middle ground between the fullview and the download. =(

Thanks again for the critique! It was very very helpful! :hug:
Hixateez Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh, that's good=D

I see:nod:
Hehe, the good thing about digital art is that you can somewhat easily go back and edit it:nod:

You're welcome:)
dully101 Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Cool I didn't think this kinda' thing was your style.
I. Was. Wrong. It's epic :clap:
justMANGO Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's a style I'm trying to hone. Dx I can't say I'm very good at it.
dully101 Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's very atmospheric. :D Keep trying ;)
kelleybean86 Dec 7, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Actually, this is pretty good, Mango. Two things:

1. The blonde guy doesn't seem to be actually looking at the winged guy. His face should probably be in a profile view.
2. The mountains are the same color and value as the blonde guy's clothing, making it difficult to read his pose. I would lighten the mountains.

Keep up the good work!
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